Writer's Workshops

Writer's Workshop

Boring sentences? Blah paragraphs? Wanna’ add some BLING to your students’ INFORMATIONAL writing? I will help guide your students in a fun, fast-paced workshop to add sparkle to their writing with strong verbs, vivid details, great leads, cool comparisons, sounds, facts, etc. It’s a perfect recipe for the Common Core!

Grades: 3-8

Length: 1 hour


Choose the focus for the workshop: strong verbs, interesting details or writing a great lead. Steve teaches for 20 minutes, the class writes for 15 - 20 minutes, followed by a group critique session led by Steve for the remainder of the time. Writer's workshop work best with groups of 25 and under, but are possible with larger groups. Student's need to be prepared with pencil, paper and writing surface.

Librarians and teachers from Houston, Texas to Hartford, Connecticut are talking about the emphasis these days on expository or nonfiction writing. Let me help kickstart a passion for writing nonfiction in your young authors by highlighting the basics of using strong verbs and interesting details. Are your students struggling with how to write a good lead or satisfying ending? We'll practice the bookends of a story- writing a solid introduction and good conclusion. Do your young authors have trouble elaborating on a main idea? This workshops focuses on revising a weak paragraph and enriching the language with specific details that show and don't tell.

Strong Verbs, Cool Details, Hook the Reader

Verbs That Zip and Zoom - The Strong Verb Workshop

Verbs are the engine of your sentence. If you remove the engine from your Aston Martin DB5 (thank you James Bond!), your car doesn’t zip down the road. Likewise, if you take out the verb from your sentence, your sentence does not move across the page.

Verbs make the sentence get up and go. And did you know, that you can write with either strong verbs or weak verbs? Why would you ever write "the snake moved across the branch" when you could write "the snake slithered across the branch?" You might also use, crawled, wriggled, slipped, slid, glided. These verbs "SIZZLE!" and are so much better than "moved." Most importantly, they create a word picture in the reader’s mind.

The strong verb workshop is action packed. During the 50-minute writing intensive we cover a lot of ground. Students should be ready to work with sharpened pencil and two sheets of lined paper.

We kick off the workshop by brainstorming what a verb is, and then we compare weak verbs and strong verbs, we’ll have fun reciting a strong verb poem, we’ll read the first page of a novel and students will try to identify all the verbs they hear in that first page, we’ll conduct a strong verb exercise replacing puny verbs with powerful ones. We’ll finish the workshop with a 15-minute writing exercise where students practice using vivid verbs. In a non-threatening, fun environment students read their pieces aloud (as many students as time allows).

Gentle encouragement is offered.

Steve talking to students

Good Writing is in The Details - The Vivid Details Workshop

Listen to these delicious details in Candy Fleming’s book Amelia Lost. "On May 20, 1932, Amelia took off from Harbour Grace, Newfoundland, the official starting point of the journey. In her cockpit she had some canned tomato juice and a few squares of chocolate, and around her waist she wore her lucky elephant-toe bracelet, the one George had given her weeks earlier. A photographer snapped a few last pictures, and when he begged for "just one more," she obliged and smiled. Then she settled into the cockpit, waved goodbye to the small crowd that had gathered, and roared off down the field. It was 7:12 p.m."

Details and specific nouns add depth and SIZZLE to your writing. Put a clearer picture in the reader’s mind by using concrete information and replacing general words with specific words. For example, instead of writing, "Steve likes candy," try "Steve likes M&M peanuts." I can’t visualize candy in my head, but I can picture "M&M peanuts." Instead of writing, " I heard a noise," you might write, "I heard a scream or a squeak or a rattle or a creak or a moan or phone."

The 50-minute details workshop is fast paced and content rich. We will begin with a review of show, don’t tell. We’ll do a little play acting and then try to write with specific honest information that shows, rather than tells the reader what is happening. We’ll read a page from a novel or a nonfiction book with rich language and the students will hunt for the great details. We’ll conduct a detail exercise replacing general nouns such as things, stuff, nice, awesome, with specific details. We’ll finish the workshop with a short writing exercise where students can harness the power of rich details. Students should come prepared with a sharpened pencil and two sheets of lined paper.

Steve helping students with their writing

Hook the Reader! - A Great Lead Workshop

Hook the reader with a great first sentence. Listen to these engaging beginnings from a few fiction books. "When the doorbell rings at three in the morning, it’s never good news." (Stormbreaker by Anthony Horowitz). "Ma, a mouse has to do what a mouse has to do." (Ragweed by Avi). "Wemberly worried about everything." (Wemberly Worried by Kevin Henkes). "I come from a family with a lot of dead people." (Each Little Bird That Sings by Deborah Wiles). "Me trousers are falling down," cried Dirty George." (Wiff and Dirty George - The Z.E.B.R.A. Incident by Stephen Swinburne). "Where’s Papa going with that ax?" said Fern to her mother as they were setting the table for breakfast." (Charlotte’s Web by E.B. White).

Leads in nonfiction books can be just as interesting. "Just imagine yourself in the most hostile place on earth." (Shipwreck At The Bottom of the World by Jennifer Armstrong) "If you were a bat, you could stay up all night." (Bats! Strange and Wonderful by Laurence Pringle) "Some kids called him "Professor Nuts Peterson." (For The Birds - The Life of Roger Tory Peterson by Peggy Thomas)

Great beginnings draw the reader in; captures their attention; they hook the reader; they make the reader keep turning the page. They SIZZLE!

In the great lead workshop, we’ll discuss why are leads important? We’ll listen to a million (well...maybe 20) great leads from children’s books and I’ll talk briefly about how I come up with leads for my nonfiction books. We’ll brainstorm what makes a good lead. Peter Jacobi in his wonderful book, The Magazine Article - How to think it, plan it, write it, says, "A lead attracts attention, establishes the subject, sets the tone and guides or bridges into the article (or book)." We’ll practice writing attention grabbing beginnings. Students will experiment writing various kinds of leads - Sound, Fact, Action, Question and Dialogue. We’ll share aloud as many leads as time permits.

Steve helping students with their writing

Writing Poetry From Animal’s Point of View

Imagine you are a baby sea turtle inside a cue-ball size egg ready to hatch. You are buried under two feet of sand. How would you break free? How would you and your brothers and sisters rise out of the dark nest? What would it be like to boil up from the sandy nest and race across the open beach, dodging sand crabs, scrambling up and down beach hills and finally reaching the tumble of waves?

In this workshop, you become the sea turtle hatchling. Obviously, students won’t have time to conduct a lot of research about sea turtles, so Steve leads the class in a brief power-point overview of sea turtle hatchling characteristics, behavior and habitats. Students take notes and list some details about the sea turtle’s environment and behavior. They will also include any cool facts that they learned during the mini-research lesson. Together we’ll brainstorm about the hatchling’s five senses: what does it look like, sound like, act like? Armed with a basic knowledge about sea turtles and a list of some good details and verbs, the student’s write a poem in the first person point of view, as if they were the hatchling. Once completed, students can volunteer to present their poem to the class.

If time allows during the workshop, each student will make an illustration about their journey to the ocean. Of course, students can add a visual to their poem later.

Steve conducted this workshop recently at an international school in Borneo. Here are some examples from third graders at Pasir Ridge International School. Check out the power of this nonfiction poetry!

One in a Thousand
By Taylor

My eyes adjusting to the light
I start my work of escaping
Hard as it can be
I break through

Teamwork is our only resource

Two days until
Sand turns into sun
I scuttle
Over giant hills of sand
I spring upwards in surprise
A crab has broken my focus

We sprint for our lives

Different directions
Wet, salty waves
Brothers and sisters
Finally I hit the water
Turning around
I realize
I am the one in the thousand.

Young and Free
By Karma

The midnight black
Fighting for hope
I rise from the underworld
I embark on my journey
Scrambling up and down
With obstacles to avoid
Snapping crabs
Hungry seagulls
Fallen logs
Mountains of sand
I feel the sun shining on me
Smelling the salty seas
Hearing the foamy waves
I am a turtle
young and free!

Breaking The Odds A Poem
By Charlotte

In my dark egg
I lift my head as I hear something
My sister’s egg breaking around her
She calls for me to join her to dig out of the dark, sandy world
I begin to rub the soft egg with my eggtooth
As the shell bursts open I begin to dig
It took over two days
Diggity,Diggity,Stop
Diggity,Diggity,Stop
I poke my tiny head out of the sandy hole
“Salutations” I cry.
I look around, see some people
One man was clicking something flashy
“Hey Kimberly!” the man with the flashy thing called
“Yes Steve?” “Look at the hatchlings!”
Ms. Kimberly picked up my sister and I
She carried us closer to the ocean
When she finally put us down
I struggled to the cool, blue sea
I persevere
I am a leather back turtle
determined to break the odds.

The Journey
By: Santiago

Crack!!
I finally demolished the round, white jail
My brothers and sisters toppled over each other to escape
Finally I caught up with them
I pressed the button for the elevator to commence
Even if it lasted for a few days
Finally we erupted from the dark underworld
We scramble toward the ocean
Snip! Snap!
A crab popped out of the sand
Quick as a wink
I dodged the crab
With a few more steps I reached the white layers of water
All my siblings began to celebrate for our successful mission!

Dark to Light
By Josefina

It’s so dark in here.
A few days past.
Finally I break the egg with my eggtooth.
I tap my brothers and sisters eggs
so they know it’s time to leave.
Crawl, rest, crawl, rest, crawl.
Snip! Snap!
A crab goes past.
We are worried.
We dashed to the wet sand.
We nearly touched the sea.
But three crabs popped out of the sand to chase me.
I crawled as fast as I can.
Then I flee to the sea.
We made it.

3 in a 1,000
By Sebastien

I scramble to escape the trap
With my egg tooth
Ahhhhhhhhh
Sand
help meeeeeeee
Ahh. I’m with my brother’s and sister’s
Digging.Digging.Stop.
Digging.Digging.Stop.
I’m out of the sandy hole!
Yea!
I listen to the sounds of the water
SPLISH!
SPLASH!
What’s that I hear?
SNIP!
SNAP!
Watch out for the crab!
Dogging the crabs
Camouflaging from seagulls
I’m focusing on the ocean
I’m on the wet sand!
SPLISH!
SPLASH!
SWISH!
SLASH!
I’m in the water!
My sister, brother and I
Are the 3 in the 1,000

Freedom
By Youssef

What is that I hear?
Oh my brother and sister!
Maybe it’s time to depart.
I struggle to achieve freedom.
Using my eggtooth to break the shell.
Oh finally I’m free!
Sand fills my eye.
Shaking my head to make it fall.
It takes two days of hard work to escape the hole.
Wait was that a snap I heard.
I sprint to the ocean before it’s too late
Now I’m free.

Writing About Shoes Workshop (Kindergarten and First Grade)

Goal: Using my book, Whose Shoes? - A Shoe For Every Job, as a model, we’ll create a class book about shoes. The book will be illustrated with color photographs taken by students and/or student created illustrations.

Steve will show a brief powerpoint presentation about shoes and how he writes a nonfiction book.

Each student will have taken a photograph or drawn a picture of someone’s shoes around their house, school or neighborhood.

Each student will then write three or four sentences about that shoe. For example, “Mr. Jones works at the zoo. He looks after the elephants. He wears tall rubber boots when he is in the elephant pen. His boots help keep his feet dry when he washes the big elephants.”

We conclude with a sing-a-long. Steve will play his ukulele and sing “Whose Shoes Will You Wear?” The class will sing the chorus. See words below:

Whose Shoes Will You Wear?

I wake up in the morning, Got someplace to go.
I’m looking for my shoes, I really want to know...

CHORUS

Whose shoes (will you wear, will you wear, will you wear)?
Whose shoes (will you wear, will you wear, will you wear)?
Whose shoes will you wear when you do the work that you do?

Could it be a teacher, standing all the day?
Could it be a farmer, piling up the hay?
What about a rock star, rocking out the beat?
What about a short stop, twirling on his cleat?

CHORUS

Maybe you’re a singer, dancer, lawyer, captain, chef.
Maybe you’re a writer, soldier, doctor, dentist, nurse.
Maybe you’re a banker, bowler, baker, billionaire.
Maybe you’re a pilot, flying people in the air!
Maybe you drive NASCAR, zipping in fast cars.
Maybe you’re an astronomer, counting all the stars!

CHORUS

REPEAT

Great Books on Nonfiction and Writing

Books on Teaching Nonfiction Writing

Nonfiction Mentor Texts - Teaching Informational Writing Through Children’s Literature, K-8 by Lynne R. Dorfman and Rose Cappelli, Stenhouse Publishers.

Nonfiction Matters: Reading, Writing, and Research in Grades 3-8 by Stephanie Harvey, Stenhouse Publishers.

Nonfiction Craft Lessons - Teaching Information Writing K-8 by Joann Portalupi and Ralph Fletcher, Stenhouse Publishers.

Nonfiction Writing From the Inside Out - Writing Lessons Inspired by Conversations with Leading Authors by Laura Robb, Scholastic.

Writing to Explore: Discovering Adventure in the Research Paper, 3-8 by David Somoza and Peter Lourie, Stenhouse Publishers.

Books on Writing

You’re marooned on a deserted island--here are the five books on writing you need:

The Magazine Article - How to think it, plan it, write it by Peter P. Jacobi, Indiana University Press.

On Writing: A Memoir of the Craft by Stephen King, Scribner.

Bird by Bird: Some Instructions on Writing and Life by Anne Lamott, Anchor. (IF you can take only one book, choose this one!)

On Writing Well by William Zinsser, Harper and Row.

The Elements of Style by William Strunk and E.B. White, Macmillan.

Four great books with writing lessons

Razzle Dazzle Writing by Melissa Forney, Maupin House Publishing.

Easy Poetry Lessons That Dazzle and Delight (grades 3-6) by David Harrison and Bernice Cullinan, Scholastic Teaching Strategies.

The Most Wonderful Writing Lessons Ever - Everything You Need to Teach the Essential Elements - and the Magic - of Good Writing (grades 2-4) by Barbara Mariconda, Scholastic Teaching Strategies.

25 Mini-Lessons for Teaching Writing - Quick Lessons That Help Students Become Effective Writers by Adele Fiderer, Scholastic Teaching Strategies.

In a lively hour-long workshop, I can help inspire your young writers and offer them some tools to become better writers. But don't take my word for it...

Writer's Workshop reviews

A teacher librarian from Connecticut!

"Education, engagement, enthusiasm, energy, and excitment for EVERYONE! This is what you can expect when you invite Steve Swinburne to your school for either an author’s presentation, a writer’s workshop or best of all, BOTH.

Steve recently visited the Head O’Meadow Elementary School in Newtown, CT for both whole-school presentations and 4 writer’s workshop sessions with third and fourth grade students. What a hit! Students from pre-school through 4th grade and teachers alike were enthralled with his presentations and engaged in his workshops. Why…because Steve brings so much to his work with students and teachers. His workshops have just the right balance of teacher and entertainer, adult and child. He has fun with the students while involving them completely in the writing process.

As the teacher librarian at Head O’Meadow I can attest to the value of having Steve visit. The number of holds I’ve placed on Steve’s books in our library; the desire of several teachers to work with Wiff and Dirty George as a class book with a number of projects planned; the interest students have shown in our writing projects in the library all demonstrate the impact his recent visit has had on the entire school population!

Run, don’t walk to your computer and book a visit now; you won’t regret it!"

Bev Bjorklund
Library Media Specialist
Head O’Meadow Elementary School
Newtown, CT

A teacher librarian from Texas!

Dear Librarians,

It is with genuine pleasure that I recommend author, Stephen Swinburne, for school programs for elementary school students and staff! His From Blank Page to Book program is customized to meet the developmental needs of elementary students. His presentation targets an integrated curriculum. These are examples:

  • Writing – use of strong introductory paragraphs with examples of ways to create them.
  • Writing – use of strong verbs to enhance meaning.
  • Science – conservation and life cycles of wild animals.
  • Music – rhythms of animal life and sounds.
  • Graphic Organizers – an example is the "cats" chart in his Bobcat…book

At our February presentation, the students and staff were equally attentive with the animal life exploration, the writing information, and the crowd management skills that Steve built into the program. There were numerous positive comments from students and staff following the presentation. To all teaching librarians I give this advice, "Make it a priority one budget item to include Steve’s presentation as part of your quality library programming for next year".

Should funding be a concern, due to the writing elements that he includes in his program, local, state, or federal funding such as Title V could be proposed, approved and allocated to pay for some or all of his presentation and expenses. You would be totally justified in making such a proposal due to the content of the program.

Sincerely,

Aileen Kirkham,
Librarian & Author of the Collaborative Bridges Series, Grades 3-5
Rosehill Elementary School Library
17950 Waller Tomball Road
Tomball, Texas 77377
Akirkham@tomballisd.net

And here's a writing tip from Steve to your students:

Steve giving the 'thumbs up' Thumbs up for INTERESTING DETAILS!

Do you really want your writing to sparkle? Do you want to be totally happy with the story you wrote about your walk in the woods? You can make your story come alive by writing with specific information that shows the reader what is happening rather than telling the reader what is happening. Maybe you’ve heard your teacher or an author say "show, don’t tell." What they mean is try to paint a very clear picture in the reader’s mind.

Here’s how it works. Look at these two examples. One is a "telling" sentence and one is a "showing" sentence. Which one is stronger, more alive? "The squirrel was active." OR "The squirrel dashed up the tree, scampered along the branch, flicked its tail, and chatted like crazy castanets."

The first sentence tells you the squirrel was active but the second sentence shows you how active the squirrel was. It helps the reader picture the image of a dashing squirrel and hear the sound it makes. By replacing general words with concrete, specific details you can "see" what the writer is saying. Your writing comes alive. A sentence that shows may take a few more words but it’s worth it.

See if you can turn these sentences that tell into sentences that show:

The mountain is high.

The forest was dark.

My backyard is nice.

If you practice, you get better at turning boring telling sentences into sentences that are alive with strong verbs, interesting details and vivid images. Have fun!


Happy writing,
Steve Swinburne
www.steveswinburne.com


P.S. I’m REALLY looking forward to my visit to your school. I can’t wait to meet all you guys! I’m very excited about my three new books for your age: Ocean Soup-Tide Pool Poems; Wiff and Dirty George-The Z.E.B.R.A. Incident and Whose Shoes? A Shoe for Every Job.

I’ve created web sites for each book, so don’t forget to check those out. Here are the links:

www.oceansoupbook.com

www.wiffanddirtygeorge.com

www.paonebook.org

Here’s a special challenge. You can hunt for the names of characters from Beatle songs, hidden throughout Wiff and Dirty George. If you find all 16 references, you will win a prize.


Steve on a school visitSteve helps a young author at Head O'Meadow School in Newtown, Connecticut, with some strong verbs and interesting details.

More writing tips...

Mark Twain said: "The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between lightning and the lightning bug." The tips that follow can help your students find the right word when they begin revising a draft.

Steve doing the strong verb sign

Remember, that first drafts can be messy and usually the writer focuses on getting ideas or the story onto paper. It’s during revision that writers can refine and shape their work. The essayist, Annie Lamotte, pointed out that an engineer has to get the blueprint for a bridge right the first time. Writers, on the other hand, can revise, revise, revise until the piece works.

Outstanding writing has strong verbs and specific nouns with only a few adjectives and adverbs. Another great Mark Twain saying is, "If you see an adjective, kill it." What Twain meant was that a specific noun can replace a series of adjectives. In addition, a strong verb can make an adverb unnecessary.

REVISING FOR STRONG VERBS

- With younger students, you should circle three to four weak verbs such as go, cook, and make. Older students can choose and circle the verbs they want to improve. These verbs are weak because they don’t create an image in the reader’s mind.

- Organize students into pairs so partners can help one another.

- Ask students to write, in the margin of their paper, several other verbs that are specific and relate to the context and meaning of the sentence and text. So go might become trudge; cook might transform into poach; and make into compel.

Steve doing the strong verb sign

- Have students choose the best verb from their brainstormed list in the margin and write it above the weak verb.

REVISING FOR SPECIFIC NOUNS

- In first drafts, students writers tend to use general nouns such as things, stuff, time, games. These wide-open words create different images in readers minds--images based on readers’ personal experiences. For example, if i write tree, readers might see an oak, maple, cherry, and all during different seasons. If the writer wants to communicate an exact image, specific nouns help.

- Follow the process I suggested for improving verbs, only circle three to four general nouns on students’ work. Once students jot down alternatives, ask them to choose the specific noun that best fits the meaning of the sentence and piece. So, stuff, might become balloons, time might be dawn, and games might be kick-the-can.

Making the revision process very specific helps student writers improve their work and tunes them into professional writers’ craft and revision techniques.